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Band 7.5

You are going to have a party. You would like to invite a friend who lives in a city that is a long way from your home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain why you are having the party * describe your plans for the party * suggest how your friend can travel to the party and where he / she can stay

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Dear Pridhi, I hope you find
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 letter in radiant spirit. I am so excited to announce that I am organizing a get-together party. I am inviting all our school friends. Counting days, to see all of our mates together after so long. I have everything planned in my mind. I know you live far from my place that's the reason I have already arranged something for you. Remember , our friend Raghav- will be picking you up from your place as he lives nearby. So, now there should be no scope for denial.
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, we all will be staying together in my basement. Everything has been taken care
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your stay. About the party, once you guys reach we will be having beers with some games
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 and music.
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, I think it is the best time to recall our good old memories and to gossip about others, I can't wait to see you all. Cheers, Bhavika
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coherence cohesion
Although the letter is quite well-organized, paragraphs could be better separated with clear breaks to enhance readability and focus on individual points.
task achievement
While the writing tone is friendly and appropriate, minor grammatical errors such as 'radiant spirit' (which could be 'good spirits') and 'Counting days' (which could be 'I am counting the days') should be fixed for a more polished letter.
task achievement
The purpose of the party and the plans are clearly conveyed, which add to the completeness of the response.
task achievement
The letter has a warm and inviting tone which is apt for a friendly invitation.
coherence cohesion
Each platform of the letter (purpose, plans, travel suggestions) is materially distinct, aiding in logical structure and clarity.
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