Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?
Nowadays there is a common debate on international forums whether the rich
countries
should support the developing countries
, especially in terms of literacy and food. I believe affluent nations must support their counterparts for global sustainability and development. In this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives followed by a conclusion.
It is argued that well-off countries
should assist under-developed countries
in terms of funds so they can spend on providing the basic necessities to their people. For example
, every year, the United States of America and the United Kingdom issue millions of donations to third-world countries
’ governments to finance establishing and running schools in remote areas of Pakistan like Chitral and Gilgit so children of poor people can get access to the basic right of education.
On the other side, some naysayers argue that wealthy states should not spend their own taxpayer’s money on anyone else. The argument is that it is the responsibility of poor governments to improve their governance and economy to feed their people. But, I believe, in the current era of the globalized world, one country can't flourish without benefiting the other counterpart. According to
the utilitarian perspective, one society can not enjoy happiness without uplighting the other society.
In conclusion, it confirms that affluent countries
should support unwealthy countries
so both can grow together towards a better sustainable world with growth and prosperity for everyone.Submitted by humayun.waheed3110 on
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Your introduction provides a clear overview of the issue, but it could be strengthened by providing a roadmap for your essay, outlining the main points you will discuss in detail.
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While you provide relevant examples, such as the aid provided by the USA and UK to Pakistan, more varied and specific examples would enhance your argument further.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to create a more logical flow. Using transitional phrases like 'Furthermore' or 'Moreover' will help with this.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively restates your main argument, but it could be more impactful by summarizing the key points made in the body paragraphs.
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You have clearly articulated your position on the issue, making your stance easy to understand for the reader.
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The examples provided are relevant and help to illustrate your points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your essay generally follows a logical structure, making it relatively easy to follow your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly frame the essay, helping to guide the reader through your argument.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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