In some areas of the US, a "curefew" is imposed, in which teenangers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is yout opinion about this?

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It is well known that in many places in the US, children are not allowed to be in public areas at a certain time of the day if they are not by an adult. In my opinion, I completely agree with

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statement and I will argue the reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.

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due to

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the increasing number of crimes in the US, it is unsafe for

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to be alone in public areas.

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, at night time fewer people are on the street, making it more unsafer to be in public areas as it is the best time for criminals to steal and not be caught.

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, it is of great importance to not leave young children alone, which may reduce the chance of being stolen or even worse kidnapped.

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a recent survey made in South America, governments said that they are thinking of applying the same rule, as 80% of the crimes

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as robberies or murders, are committed at late times of the day.

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we do not have to live as if we were in jail, it is important to be aware of what is happening in our surroundings and try to avoid having a bad moment.

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, it would be a better option if

kids

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could meet at one of their houses and play there

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of going out.

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, a recent article suggests that a great number of

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had been kidnapped were outside their houses in front of their caregivers.

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to say, even though adults can be watching their

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, it may not prevent a tragedy.

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, even though it may be difficult to live with restrictions on children's freedom

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as not allowing them to be outside without an adult, it can reduce the risk of robbery or kidnapping.

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In some areas of the US, a "curefew" is imposed, in which teenangers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is yout opinion about this?

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