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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museim during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museim during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods
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The given table illustrates data about Ashdown Museum's number of
visitors
 between the
year
 before and the
year
 after it was renovated. The pie charts contain results of surveys of
visitors
' satisfaction
in
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at
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 different levels during the same two periods.
Overall
,
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ration
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ratio
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 of
visitors
 had uplifted with the
gavge
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gavage
 of very satisfied and just satisfied guests within a
year
 after refurbishment.
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 with a
year
 before, dissatisfied and very dissatisfied callers were diminished,
although
, disgruntled inspectors accounted
more
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for more
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 than half
at
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of
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 all. The number of frequenters who did not respond was the same in both years. In the years before replenishment, the index of
visitors
were
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was
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 74.000, and frustrated guests considered one-three at all.
While
well pleased
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 callers accounted
only
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for only
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 25 per cent, not reaching half the population.
Visitors
 who did not take part
to
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in
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 the surveys were only 5%. In the
year
 after renovation,
rate
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 of guests in the museum, sharply climbed with
difference
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a difference
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18.000
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of 18.000
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 people. Very satisfied and just satisfied
visitors
were
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increased by 50%
while
 the malcontent population decreased by five-twenty four proportion. People with no responses accounted for the same percentage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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