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The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart belo gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by American by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart demonstrates the data on the ratio of
income
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 and
expenditure
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 by
Americans
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 belonging to the different
age
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groups
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 in 2013.
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, individuals had the highest
income
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 and
expenditure
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 rate in the
age
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groups
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 of 35-44 and 44-54. It is obvious that in all ages
Americans
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 had higher
income
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 rather than
expenditure
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, except when they were under 25, as in that
age
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 group
people
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 spent money more than they earned.
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,
people
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 over 75 have nearly the same
income
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 and
expenditure
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.
However
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, the minimum in earnings and spending was observed among young
people
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 aged below 25, their
income
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 was equal to 30000
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dollars
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3,000
,
while
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expenditure
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 was just below 30000
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dollars
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3,000
. Starting from 25 until 54
people
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 worked hard and
as a result
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, had a higher
income
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 in the
age
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groups
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 of 25-34, 35-44, 45-54. It
also
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 should be mentioned that the maximum of
this
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 chart constituted about 80.000
dollars
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 as an
income
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 of
people
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 aged 35-44 and 45-54. Most of the
times
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time
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, there was a big difference in the ratio of
income
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 to
expenditure
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, only except
ages
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for ages
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 younger than 25 and older than 75.
Americans
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 spent money the most when they were between 45 and 54, particularly 60000
dollars
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, which was the maximum in all
age
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groups
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.
Furthermore
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, the amount of money that
Americans
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 spent grew until they reached 45-54, but after that, a downward trend was observed. Clearly, the minimum was reached as they got older and became 75+, approximately 35000
dollars
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, which was the same as their
income
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, expenditure, americans, age, groups, people, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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