IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: ○ Say that you liked their photos of your family ○ Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event ○ Give them the details of the event Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear….

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I hope you are doing amazing in your life. I am writing
this
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 letter about the photos you clicked at our
last
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 event which were liked by everyone in my family.
Firstly
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, I would like to appreciate the efforts you have put into the recent function for clicking our pictures and it is so beautiful as the whole family was impressed by your work.
Moreover
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, I would be really happy if you would be the photographer for my upcoming event and make my day special with your skills.
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, the event is going to be very special and happening on Saturday evening which is coming on the weekend as it is my birthday party. We want you to be our family photographer for all functions. I am going to organize
this
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 function in my backyard and invite my family and friends So, I want to capture every moment from
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 party and make a short album or video tape to have it forever. I hope for a positive response and looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Damanpreet Kaur

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details for better readability.
task achievement
Review for minor grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing to improve clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
The letter clearly expresses appreciation for the photographer's previous work.
greeting and closing
The closing paragraph provides a clear expectation and conveys a polite tone.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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