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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is only fair to say that eating insects has become one of the most disputed and argued ideas all over the globe with its advantages and disadvantages that affect our lives in different aspects. In
this
 essay, I will explore the positives and negatives of eating bugs. One of the most cited advantages of having insects is getting a source of nourishment.In explanation, there is no fear of a dramatic increase in population, because people will have a new source of food which is free and available all the time.
In addition
, another positive is that flies are full of protein.
According to
 the British newspaper, The Independent, scientists said that creepy are rich in protein, available in large quantities, and contain very little fat, and
thus
 can help combat obesity.
On the other hand
, one of the biggest cited demerits is the spreading of diseases. More precisely, flies are not created as food for humans to eat them, because they can be harmful for them and cause plenty of diseases. To illustrate, a long time ago, populations in Oman were eating too many grasshoppers
due to
 the lack of nourishment.
Additionally
, another negativity is non- balanced environment. In explanation, play a role in pollinating crops, but if people start eating them horribly, it will be a massive loss for agriculture.
For example
, individuals in Chain eat so many various crawlies which affected deeply the environment. In conclusion, the main advantage of eating crawly is getting a source of food,
while
 the primary disadvantage is the harmful impacts on nature.
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relevant specific examples
Work on providing more specific and substantiated examples. The example about Oman is good, but the reference to China could be more detailed and specific.
clear comprehensive ideas
Improve the clarity of expression. Some parts of the essay are a bit difficult to follow due to awkward phrasing or grammatical errors. Proofreading and refining the language could make your arguments clearer.
complete response
Ensure consistency in terminology and avoid mixing terms like 'flies' and 'insects' interchangeably unless specified. Also, try to be more specific with terms (e.g., 'creepy crawlies' is too informal and vague).
supported main points
More detailed context and elaboration for each point would enhance the essay. For example, expand on the impact of harvesting insects on the environment, and provide more examples or studies to support points.
logical structure
Good structure with clear introduction and conclusion.
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Introduction and conclusion are clearly present, which helps encapsulate the topic and provide closure.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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