The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possibles sites for the supermarket.
The map illustrates the two proposed
location
for a new Fix the agreement mistake
locations
supermarket
in Garlsdon. Overall
, it can be seen that the supermarket
is planned to locate
in the countryside and in the Wrong verb form
be located
town
centre
.
In terms of a new supermarket
in countryside
, it is Add an article
the countryside
sited
just off the main roads in the Verb problem
situated
north-west
, which Correct your spelling
northwest
is
the way roads from Correct subject-verb agreement
are
town
Add an article
the town
centre
to the Hindon. Moreover
, this
location
is passed by railway in the south-west
from Cransdon to Hindon and opposite. The accessibility makes the new Correct your spelling
southwest
supermarket
tend to have many customers to purchase,
since Remove the comma
apply
this
location
is passed by three places with 39,000 population in total.
Regarding the
second Change preposition
The
location
of a
new Correct article usage
the
supermarket
is proposed to be in the town
centre
that has two main roads, Cransdon and Brandsdon, which has
15,000 and 29,000 population, respectively. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
Moreover
, it is also
passed by the railway. The supermarket
offered in the second location
provided enormous customers. However
, their location
in the town
centre
is no traffic zone, which is make
the Change the verb form
makes
location
is
inaccessible for Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
customer
who Fix the agreement mistake
customers
used
personal Wrong verb form
use
transportations
.
In conclusion, the Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
country side
as Correct your spelling
countryside
location
for the new Add an article
the location
a location
supermarket
is more reliable, as for getting a lot of customers to purchase some product in the supermarket
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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