The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possibles sites for the supermarket.

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The map illustrates the two proposed

location

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locations

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for a new

supermarket

in Garlsdon.

Overall

, it can be seen that the

supermarket

is planned to

locate

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in the countryside and in the

town

centre

. In terms of a new

supermarket

countryside

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the countryside

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, it is

sited

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situated

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just off the main roads in the

north-west

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northwest

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, which

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are

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the way roads from

town

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the town

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centre

to the Hindon.

Moreover

this

location

is passed by railway in the

south-west

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southwest

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from Cransdon to Hindon and opposite. The accessibility makes the new

supermarket

tend to have many customers to purchase

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since

this

location

is passed by three places with 39,000 population in total.

Regarding the

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second

location

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the

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new

supermarket

is proposed to be in the

town

centre

that has two main roads, Cransdon and Brandsdon, which

has

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15,000 and 29,000 population, respectively.

Moreover

, it is

also

passed by the railway. The

supermarket

offered in the second

location

provided enormous customers.

However

, their

location

in the

town

centre

is no traffic zone, which

is make

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the

location

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inaccessible for

the

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apply

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customer

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customers

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who

used

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use

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personal

transportations

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transportation

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. In conclusion, the

country side

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countryside

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location

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the location

a location

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for the new

supermarket

is more reliable, as for getting a lot of customers to purchase some product in the

supermarket

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words location, supermarket, town, centre with synonyms.

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4 paragraphs

207 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possibles sites for the supermarket.

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as everyday basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. TO what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Should high school students be required to study many different subjects at the same time, or should they study only three or four subjects at a time? Do you agree or disagree?