Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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so many
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who are living doing work for which they have no passion or skills. The first type of
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no love
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the job that they
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. For
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two examples. The earliest is
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just wanted to have a great salary. To feed themselves and try to survive, they are spending their time with that kind of
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.
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, there
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were forced,
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thing, that really
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the person so the human who is imposing to achieve a goal. The
people
whose has no talent might be in some other situation. They have a want and
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for
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, but
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not that
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at it.
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music industry, they love and enjoy but
in
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the
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honest
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really terrible at it.
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, they may have a lot of burnout because of not improving their skills. In my opinion,
everyone
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of us must
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do whatever we want. We live only once and
this
is very sad to
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such
a wonderful time youth to stay at
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place we do not want to be. But if we have no ability
then
need to give a process to think. In conclusion, so many
people
working so hard but not good to hear that they have no devotion or flair
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this
. If the
people
looked at more details they might understand the importance:
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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