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The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the 8 steps
process
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 of making
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storage
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a storage
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 building from concrete
canvas
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.
Overall
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, the
8 steps
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8-step
process
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 of making
area
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an area
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 for
storage
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 starts from manufacturing the concrete
canvas
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 and ends with having the
dome
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 for storing after it
setted
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is set
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 for 20 to 24 hours. The
storage
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 building
process
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 commences with
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the manufacuring
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manufacuring
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manufacturing
process
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 of making concrete
canvas
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form
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from
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 dru concrete before delivering
to
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it to
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 construction sites. The concrete
canvas
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 is
then
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 unwrapped and
spreaded
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spread
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 on the ground. The
spreaded
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spread
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 concrete
canvas
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 is grounded by pegs, having 10 metres spacing with each other. The fifth step of the construction
,
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apply
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 is to blow the concrete
canvas
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 to create a
storage
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dome
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, attracted by a door. The concrete
canvas
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dome
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 is
then
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 watered until it
to be
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is
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 8
metres
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8-metre
 high
dome
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. The wet
dome
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 is
rest
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rested
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 for setting for another 20 to 24 hours before
it
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it is
it was
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 available for storing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, storage, canvas, dome with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • process
  • storage area
  • material
  • concrete canvas
  • prepare
  • level
  • compact
  • lay
  • wet
  • activate
  • cement
  • hydrate
  • harden
  • form
  • solid structure
  • edges
  • secure
  • infiltration
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