An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both side individuals and companies to shopping online ?

Digital
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market has been increasing widely,
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and with
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the increase in trend number of
individual
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individuals
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prefer to do digital shopping rather than window shopping. As each individual
busy
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in
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with
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their lifestyle to save
their
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apply
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time
and to move with
the
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fast
fashion
, preference is given to online shopping
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while
, the drawbacks are
individual
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individuals
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can
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thrift with it sometimes and the
fashion
brand can have a loss in its value by various factors.
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essay will discuss the positive and negative impacts on
indivduals
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individuals
individual
and
company
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companies
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. Nowadays,
time
is considered
as
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money and with the
icreasing
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increasing
time
of their
woking
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working
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hours every person would love to reserve their
time
rather than going to buy in person. As with buying things digitally they can select whatever size they need and can
also
get many options.
However
, sometimes
this
can be a major downside for them as there might be chances of misleading them
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by
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sending them different sizes or
colour
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colours
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.
Fashion
brands have an upper hand in showcasing their fashions on online
platform
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platforms
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with many options for them to buy. They can be wicked by showing their amazing marketing strategy to attract more and more customers by showing them unique advertising so individuals can
be spent
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spend
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thrift.
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, the only downside is that with their policy of
returns
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returns,
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companies had to have huge
loss
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losses
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.
for example
, people
by
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buy
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stuff and
would
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apply
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send them return after using it which is profitable for
individual
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individuals
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but not for
company
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companies
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. As
this
trend is very common. In conclusion with the market being
digital
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digital,
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it has got its positive and negative impacts both.
For
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some
scenario
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scenarios
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is
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the upperhand
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upperhand
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upper hand
upper-hand
for
individual
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individuals
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in saving
time
,
moving
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and moving
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forward in
fashion
but setting them back
with
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by
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misleading them. For
companies
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companies,
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its
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in
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on
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positive
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the positive
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side for them to
icrease
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increase
its
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their
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market but sets them back with their returns policy by having so many products in return.
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Consider providing more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific fashion brands or types of products that people frequently buy online.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. Make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors. Although small mistakes are acceptable, consistent errors can affect readability.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that outline the main points discussed.
complete response
You effectively discuss both the advantages and disadvantages for individuals and companies.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt and provides a balanced view of the topic, which is crucial for task achievement.

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