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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter: - describe the work yoy have been doing - explain why you can no longer do this work - recommend another person who is interested in the work

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I can no longer continue the voluntary
work
 in your organization. I have been working as a field staff member and was responsible for visiting people's houses to make them aware that bees are an essential part of the ecosystem. I was so passionate about
this
work
, but my current company wants me to do extra
work
 after hours.
Consequently
, I will have no time left to do that voluntary
work
.
However
, One of my friends is interested in doing
this
work
. The best part is that he is a student in an agriculture program, So he possesses knowledge about bee culture. Waiting to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Abc
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coherence cohesion
Some sentences feel abruptly connected. Consider using more linking words to enhance flow.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph could be more focused on a single idea, ensuring clear separation between different points.
task achievement
You may elaborate more on why it is difficult to continue the work, perhaps giving more details about your new responsibilities.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate and polite.
task achievement
You clearly described your voluntary work and provided a suitable recommendation.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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