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The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the number of adult
visitors
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, under-15 age group, and special exhibition
visitors
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 to a
museum
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 from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the majority of the
museum
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 guests were adults during the given period. It can be seen that the
museum
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 in 2007 had the highest figure of
visitors
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. Looking in more detail, in 1997 the
adult
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number of adult
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 attendees were 300,100, the figure had increased moderately in 2002, reaching approximately 302,200. The number of adult guests in 2007 peaked at 400,500, followed by a gradual decline in 2012 with 380,000. Visiting the
museum
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 was more common among people under the age of fifteen in 1997, with 120,000 in that year. The number dropped every year and comprised 82,300 by 2012.
While
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 the figures for special exhibition
visitors
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 were
unward
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unaware
upward
inward
 during the period, starting around 28,000 to 42,000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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