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Band 7

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekends. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that there should be longer weekends and shorter working weeks. I totally disagree with
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 statement. I believe that the proposed time repartition between worktime and days off could demoralise workers
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 reduce their productivity and impact negatively in the
overall
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 economic situation in the world. Workers need motivation and purpose to continue their work, which is why more days off would be less likely to help than our regular timetable. Having 48 hours of rest after five days of labour is what makes them special; they leave us the time to do what we want without altering our perception of worktime being the main reason why we sustain ourselves.
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, 72 hours
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 of the standard 48 would probably make us ungrateful for the spare time given to us, since we did not work as much to deserve it.
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, coming home to a 72-hour-long pause could potentially make us less eager to make the most out of it since it is not as hard-earned as before. Production speed is crucial in modern societies since it sustains the economy,
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 guaranteeing sustainable employment conditions.
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, if employees were authorised to have a longer break,
this
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 decision could negatively impact society because production would drop and cause economic instability in the country.
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, in the Dominican Republic, in 1999, the people were granted a free Monday.
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, the carbon extraction business , on which the country deeply relied in terms of revenue, started to sell less carbon , and the economy fell.
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, some individuals would like to have a longer break.
Nonetheless
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, I think
this
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 decision could trigger a lack of motivation in employees and a loss in terms of production that could negatively influence the economy.

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task
Make sure you fully answer the prompt. State your view clearly and keep all ideas on that view.
examples
Use 2-3 simple points, each with a brief example, and explain how it shows your view.
coherence
Link paragraphs with simple words like also, but, therefore, and so to show how ideas are linked.
structure
Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and keep a steady line of thought from one idea to the next.
language
Check spelling and use common words to avoid confusion; prefer short and plain phrasing.
strength
The writer makes the view clear from the start.
strength
There is a conclusion that restates the view.
strength
Some reason and an example are given to support the view.
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