Some people believe that social media is improving relationships by keeping people connected, while others think it is causing a decline in face-to-face interactions. Discuss both views.

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There is no doubt that social media has increased significantly over the past 10 years.

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, some people believe that it enhances relationships by linking people

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others argue that it is causing a reduction in

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interactions. In

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essay, I will discuss both perspectives and explain my support for the former view.

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task achievement

Expand your essay with more detailed supporting points for both perspectives. Include examples to strengthen your argument.

coherence cohesion

Clearly state your thesis at the end of your introduction to guide the reader. Ensure that each body paragraph has a clear main idea and is well-organized.

introduction conclusion

Your introduction clearly sets the stage for discussing both viewpoints.

logical structure

Your essay is logically structured, with a clear progression from introduction to main body sections.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

56 words

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