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You caused some damage to the kitchen area of your flat. Write a letter to your landlord explaining the following. •How the damage occurred •The extent of damage •What you would like to landlord to do.

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Dear Mr. Gill, I am your tenant (43 Thornbush Street) writing to inform you that I have caused some damage in the kitchen by mistake. My sincere apology for the problem caused
due to
 my actions. Recently, I came back from India and my best friend visited me
last
 Sunday. So, we decided to cook at home. As you know cooking at home gives you a lot of dishes to clean.
As a result
 of
this
, I put all the dishes including pans, plates, cups and bowls in the dishwasher and overloaded it. After some time it started giving me errors
due to
 overloading, and when I checked, it was not able to drain the soap water from it. I think the issue is with the drain pipe.
However
, I tried to fix it but failed to do so.
Therefore
, I request you to send the technician to the place.
Moreover
, don't worry about the repair cost, I am ready to pay it as it is
due to
 my fault. I assure you that I will be more careful in the future about it. Kind Regards, Harmandeep Kaur
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task achievement
Ensure clarity by specifying small details such as the nature of the errors shown by the dishwasher.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by dividing the account of events and the request for help into separate paragraphs for better clarity.
task achievement
Clear and polite tone throughout the letter, perfectly suitable for communication with a landlord.
coherence cohesion
Use of paragraphs to communicate distinct ideas, which improves readability.
coherence cohesion
Strong opening and closing, which adds to the overall clarity and cohesiveness of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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