The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.
The line chart compares the amount of money for
three
most popular cakes in a shop in 2014.
In general, people consumed more bread than pies. Correct article usage
the three
In addition
, the buns
sale decreased sharply from September to the end of the year.
It is clearly seen that initially
, bread was the most popular consumption in the store, around $ 80,000 before falling down significantly by nearly half in March. Over the next 6 months, the figures for bread fluctuated, after that it increased strongly and reached at
the highest point again. Change preposition
apply
While
buns
consumption went up dramatically by $30,000 from Jan to May, before remaining stable for 3 months. From August, the figures for consuming buns
hit a
lowest point Change the article
the
to
$30,000 Change preposition
of
at the end
of the year.
Turning to the pies, the number of sales rose slowly for 10 months, however
, it significantly came up to $40,000, higher $10,000 than sale
of Add an article
the sale
a sale
buns
in December of that year.Submitted by duyuyen18 on
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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