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The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustrated diagram represents a system
that is
 used for generating electricity from waves. As it is observed, wave power creates air movement,
that
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 makes the structure produce power.
Firstly
, water from waves enters a chamber, when approaching the cliff, so that air from the wave movement rapidly goes up through a column, making a turbine turn clockwise. The chamber traps the water in it, guiding it to the column. Following that,
turbine
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the turbine
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 spins, creating electricity power.
Afterward
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, air enters the column opposite way;
thus
, moving
turbine
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the turbine
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 again
the
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 same direction. Wave goes away from the sea wall and
then
 the process repeats itself.
Overall
, the mentioned diagram depicts a perfect process of
renewable
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the renewable
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 energy system.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 5 times.
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