The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The Table displays how much money was distributed as
support
to four countries including China, Indonesia, Thailand, and South Africa in 1974 and 2014. The bar graph illustrates the way financial
support
was spent in the same years.
Overall
, the need
of
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money
support
in these four nations shrunk in all
the
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three categories: catering, medicine, and finance. 
To begin
with, in 1974 South Africa received the largest financial
support
with 65
million
dollars
, followed by China with 62
million
dollars
. The figures for Indonesia and Thailand were 55
million
dollars
and 48
million
dollars
, respectively. Forty years later, the amount for China plummeted sharply to 6
million
dollars
.
While
that
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of
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Thailand
also
fell by 30 
million
dollars
, Indonesia and South Africa experienced roughly
25
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% decrease each.  Regarding the categories of financial
support
, in 1974, medicine was supported the most with 80
million
dollars
, and the figures for catering and finance were 70
million
dollars
each. In 2014, The most significant drop was observed in catering by 45%,
while
medicine and finance declined by 20% and 5%, respectively.
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