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Write a letter to the landlord about the unavailability of hotwater. State your reason for writing. Describe the problems and explain how you feel. Propose a solution and ask the landlord to take actions.

#landlord #unavailability #hotwater #reason #actions
Dear Mr Sam, Hope
this
 letter finds you well.I am writing
this
 letter to discuss the major problem at home and
that is
,
unavailability
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the unavailability
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 of
hotwater
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hot water
.
Its
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It's
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 been 2 weeks that I
am having
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have had
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this
 problem.On September 10, when
i
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I
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 came home from work. I went for
shower
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the shower
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 because I was so tired. I turned on the
hotwater
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hot water
hot-water
 tap to wash my face, but only cold water was coming. So, I thought to wait for some time, it may come. Unfortunately, it didn't
came
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come
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 and I took
shower
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a shower
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also
 with cold water. After that, I went to ask my neighbours and it was coming
in
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into
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 their house. So, I complained
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about this
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this
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apply
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to
management
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the management
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 of
building
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the building
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, I didn't
got
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get
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 any response back.
Its
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It's
It is
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 my humble request to check what is the problem behind
this
 issue. I am facing so many problems
due to
lack
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the lack
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 of
hotwater
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hot water
 availability at home,
everytime
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every time
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 I have to boil the water anywhere needed. I hope to hear back soon. Yours faithfully, Sim
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical errors such as 'its' instead of 'it's' and 'didn't came' instead of 'didn't come'.
coherence structure
Consider arranging the paragraphs in a way that makes the letter flow even more logically. For example, you may want to first state the problem, then describe how it affects you, and finally propose a solution.
task achievement
You clearly specified the reason for writing and described the problem in detail.
writing tone
The tone of your letter is polite and appropriate for this kind of request.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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