You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •say about the concert •say why you are unable to go •inform how your friend can receive the ticket

Dear Raman, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I have bought a
ticket
for Diljit Dosanjh's
show
at Rogers Arena, but I will not be able to attend. If you are interested, just let me know so I can save
this
ticket
.
This
show
will be memorable because the audience gathering will be exponentially high, and Diljit will perform his new album songs, so you can imagine how the aroma will be.
This
time, Hollywood singer Trever Scot will
also
perform with him in the latter half of the
show
. I was so excited about
this
show
. Arsh and I bought two tickets one month ago.
However
, yesterday, I learned that my father needs immediate kidney surgery.
Therefore
, the doctor has given us a date that matches the
show
's date.
Moreover
, you and Arsh are good friends. You guys will enjoy it there as both of you are funny by nature. Please let me know in advance so I can send my
ticket
through Arsh, and he will give it to you at the office. I am not concerned about the
ticket
price, you can pay me later on. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, GS
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coherence cohesion
You could slightly improve the logical flow by breaking down longer sentences or splitting ideas into shorter, more focused paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Although your response is well-structured, consider adding more transitional phrases to enhance the flow between the points.
task achievement
You have addressed all the required points clearly and thoroughly.
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Your tone is friendly and appropriate for the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a logical structure and a clear greeting and closing.
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