The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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The pie chart illustrates the primary vehicles chosen by
college
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students
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or
university
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employees to go to the
university
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in 2004 and 2009. It is noteworthy that most people liked to go to the
university
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by car in 2004, but in 2009
bus
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the bus
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was preferred. In 2004, more than half of the poll participants used
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the car
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to go to the
university
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, followed by
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the bus
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, at 33%. Exercising
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going to the
university
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was not favoured by the
college
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students
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and
university
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employees, showed by small
fractions
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of people chose cycling (9%) and walking (4%). The least favorite vehicle was
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a train
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, comprising only 3% of the respondents. Meanwhile, in 2009 the ultimate vehicle used to travel to
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switched to bus, accounting for 46% of the polls. The second option liked was transporting with a car, at 28%.
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2004,
pedaling
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to work was the third option for
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college
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students
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and
university
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employees, though the percentage
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doubled from 2004, in 2009
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accounting
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for 16%. Travelling to the
college
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by walking or riding the train
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also
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the least popular among
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students
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and
university
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workers, at 6% and 4%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, students, university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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