Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Some people say that advertising has a positive impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by a lot of people that advertising is changing our daily life,which is really ordinary around us.I completely agree that advertising is
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to us
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because it lets us
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know
more information about
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short amount of time.
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know about many details of some products ,activities and so on in
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convenient way.
This
is excellent to some extent,because I can save much time and energy to find and collect
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information
.
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,I frequently sign in some affordable travel groups through advertising
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the Internet,which can save
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money and give me a lot of interesting
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.So it seems clear that
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advertising
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us
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on
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lives.
Furthermore
,advertising let me
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know
more about
this
world,which can help us better
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of
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the trends of the era.It is commonly
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recognized
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that advertising plays
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improtant
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important
and positive promotional role.If you don't attention
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adverting
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,you will lose a bit of
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,
such
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we
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can find jobs through advertising. Granted,some agree that advertising
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negative influences
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our
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,which will distract our focus power.
This
is
due to
the fact that we do not have enough capability to distinguish the authenticity of
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information
and filter out valuable information. To summarize,
although
views on
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issue vary from person to person,I
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to believe that advertising is still essential for our daily life
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because it
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us know about
many
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meaningful information in
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time.
As a result
,only paying attention to advertising can make you catch every useful and meaningful
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