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Some people feel that it will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. Others are not in favour of the same. Discuss both the point of views and give your opinion.

#people #society #individuals #driverless #cars #favour #point
There is no denying in the act that
driverless
 rides are more enjoyable. Whilst its a commonly held
believe
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 that
driverless
cars
 are better for
the
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society, there is
also
 an argument that
apposes
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opposes
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 it. In my opinion, believe that the disadvantages of
driverless
cars
 outweigh the advantages.
This
 essay will discuss both views and how a business can
detoriate
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deteriorate
job
apportunities
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opportunities
 for individuals. On the one hand,
driverless
cars
 can mean many things: a safe ride, privacy, and peace.
Driverless
cars
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companies
 are benefiting because many
people
 enjoy their service.
Additionally
, the company does not have to worry about paying workers
nor
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or
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 looking for workers with special skills unlike other
companies
 going through these complications.
On the other hand
, many
indefiduals
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individuals
 are suffering the issue of not finding a
job
. When these
driverless
 car
companies
 grow larger and
people
 start using them excessively, it will cause the other
companies
 to die eventually. These cause a reduction in
job
apportunities
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opportunities
 which will deteriorate
individual's
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an individual's
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 financial status and cause
people
 a hard time trying to find a
job
. In conclusion, despite
people
 having different views,
i
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I
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 believe that
selfdriving
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self-driving
self driving
cars
 do not benefit
the
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society as much as it is deteriorating. Many
people
 could benefit
staying
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from staying
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 in that seat and driving better than leaving it empty.
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You have made an effort to discuss both points of view, which is essential for this type of essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Autonomous Vehicles** - A term referring to driverless or self-driving cars.
  • 2. **Human Error** - Mistakes made by people while driving, often leading to accidents.
  • 3. **Traffic Congestion** - Overcrowded roadways, often resulting in slower movement.
  • 4. **Mobility Solutions** - Transportation options for individuals who have difficulty moving around.
  • 5. **Emissions** - Pollutants released into the air by vehicles.
  • 6. **Technical Reliability** - The dependability of the technology to function as intended.
  • 7. **Job Displacement** - The loss of jobs due to new technology or automation.
  • 8. **Cyber-attacks** - Attempts by hackers to gain unauthorized access to computerized systems.
  • 9. **Liability** - Legal responsibility for something, often in the context of accidents or damages.
  • 10. **Ethical Considerations** - Moral issues that arise regarding the fairness and implications of decisions.
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