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In the future, no one will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything online with out paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree? with this statment

#future #newspapers #books #statment
It is predictable that in the upcoming years, everyone will give preference to read
E-
books
instead
 of buying printed newspapers or
books
. I strongly agree with
this
 approach and I believe it will
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happen
 soon. The prominent benefit is that In
this
 contemporary era, everyone has a smart device
such
 as
mobile
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a mobile
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 phone, tablet
and
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 computer. To explain, these days, People have their own phones where they can download all types of
books
 including
text
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textbooks
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books
, motivational, stories,
comedy
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comedies
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 and other
books
 with easy access. With the
assist
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 of
E-
books
, Individuals may not only save their precious time
,
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 but
also
 broaden their
horizon
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horizons
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 of knowledge as they can search
word
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meaning
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meanings
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along with
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while
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 reading
books
.
Therefore
, In the blink of an eye, people can get access
of
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varied
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 range of
books
 within a second.
Moreover
, reading online
books
 is an effective way to save money because most
of
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the
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E-
books
 are free or extremely cheap.
However
, the price of paper material has been
inclining
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increasing
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 dramatically in the
last
 few years.
As a result
, people can download these
books
 within a short time despite going
to
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anywhere.
On the other hand
, some individuals may argue that paper
books
 are more convenient to read as it does not
put
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 an adverse impact on eyesight.
Opponenets
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Opponents
beleive
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believe
 that reading
E-
books
 are not good for
eyes
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,
Nevertheless
, I think
this
 problem can be managed if everyone
use
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 the technology in the correct way. In conclusion,
although
 reading online
books
 may
put
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bad
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a bad
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 impact on eyesight, yet there are many advantages of reading online
books
 or newspapers as individuals can read various types of
books
by
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 one
serach
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search
 and save
a
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apply
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money
while
 doing
this
.
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grammar
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors such as verb agreement (e.g., 'will happen,' 'People have') and typos ('serach','beleive').
task response
Provide a bit more depth and specific examples in your points. For instance, mention specific studies or statistics regarding the rise of e-books and the decline of printed books.
task response
Ensure that all arguments are fully developed with clear reasoning and examples. For instance, when mentioning the cost of paper, give a specific example or statistic to support the claim.
coherence
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.

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