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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

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Dear Maria, I hope
this
 letter finds you in great spirits. I am excited to hear that you are coming here to spend two -weeks. You do not have to worry about anything because I will always be there for you to help. About your stay, you will be living with me so that we have some time to recall our childhood memories.
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, I have an itinerary in my mind. If you want we can go together. so the plan will be
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, we will go to Banff first day and will do tracking till the point we don't see the glaciers. The next day, we will go visit the town named Canmore. There are lots of hot springs in between. You better grab some warm clothes. We can go to
Correct article usage
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 spot in the downtown area. I am counting days to see you and I can't wait to tell you some gossip about our childhood friend. Cheers, Bhavika
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has clear paragraphing to separate different points (e.g., finding accommodation, activities to do, what to pack). This will improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Add more specific details about the places you plan to visit and what activities you can do there to fully address 'give advice about what to do and see in your area.'
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm, friendly, and appropriate for writing to a friend, which enhances the suitability of the writing tone.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-executed and add to the overall positive impression of the letter, making it feel personal and genuine.
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