The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The first line graph illustrates the trend of electrical household product ownership
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the second line graph gives information about weekly housework
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spent in a particular state between 1920 and 2019. It is clearly seen from the first chart that even though all the appliances saw an increase, only the washing machine experienced fluctuation. The second chart shows that
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spent doing household activities declined throughout the given period. Refrigerator saw the highest jump of all products. Started at 0% usage in 1920, it skyrocketed to 90% in 1960, it
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increased to 100% in 1980 and remained until 2019.
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, the use of vacuum
cleaner
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gradually increased from only 30% in 1920 and grew 20% every 20 years until 1980.
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, it rose to 100% in 2000 and stayed.
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, washing machine usage fluctuated, it gradually increased from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 but dropped slightly to 65% in 1980.
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, it recovered to 70% in 2000 and increased to above 70% in 2019. The second curve chart shows that housework weekly
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spending decreased over
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. Stood at 50% in 1920, it dropped to 20% in 1960 and dipped even more to around 15% in 1980.
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there was a plateau until 2000, it
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dropped to around 10% in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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