The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given
map
compares three locations, one of which will be chosen to build a leisure centre.
Overall
, there are buildings constructed in
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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A and B,
meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
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area
C is located beyond the trees. The first option,
area
A, is on the east side of the
map
. Located just beside the river that goes to the
center
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centre
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of the
map
. The
area
is occupied
with
Change preposition
by
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a factory and can be accessed from the main road. Location B is in the middle of the
map
, with multiple accesses to get to
this
area
. An apartment complex is
build
Wrong verb form
built
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in
this
place. Similar to
area
A,
this
area
is located near the river.
However
,
area
B might require more steps to get to the river.
Lastly
, the
area
C which
occupy
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occupies
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the western part of the
map
. There is a building-free
area
behind the forest which can be constructed into something completely new without demolishing buildings. The large field is behind the trees and access
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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not available to reach
this
area
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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