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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
map
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 compares three locations, one of which will be chosen to build a leisure centre.
Overall
Linking Words
, there are buildings constructed in
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area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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 A and B,
meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
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area
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 C is located beyond the trees. The first option,
area
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 A, is on the east side of the
map
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. Located just beside the river that goes to the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
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. The
area
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 is occupied
with
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by
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 a factory and can be accessed from the main road. Location B is in the middle of the
map
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, with multiple accesses to get to
this
Linking Words
area
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. An apartment complex is
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 in
this
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 place. Similar to
area
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 A,
this
Linking Words
area
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 is located near the river.
However
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,
area
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 B might require more steps to get to the river.
Lastly
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, the
area
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 C which
occupy
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occupies
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 the western part of the
map
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. There is a building-free
area
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 behind the forest which can be constructed into something completely new without demolishing buildings. The large field is behind the trees and access
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 not available to reach
this
Linking Words
area
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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