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People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

#people #money #tax
Some individuals think they should be exempted
on
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from
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 paying
tax
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taxes
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 to the
country
 where he/she
belong
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belongs
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 and save all his/her income to himself/herself. I completely disagree with
this
 statement because it will
affected
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affect
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 mostly the health
sectors
 and educational
sectors
 of the government. To commence with, the
tax
 is the
life line
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lifeline
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 of the government to function and to serve its
people
, so, if the
people
 keep all the money they earn and not
paying
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pay
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 the
tax
 to the state,
therefore
 the health
sectors
 will be weakened and will not be able to provide quality services to the
people
.
Moreover
, new diseases will appear and it will be hard
to
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for to
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 administration to aid
it
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them
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,
beacuse
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because
 there
is
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are
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no
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not
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 enough funds.
For instance
, almost all countries
were
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have been
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 affected by
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 virus, and it is difficult for them to control it,
and
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apply
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most of the funds of the government were
alloted
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allowed
allocated
allotted
 to
the
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apply
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hospitals to cure and save
people
, and most countries need to seek financial assistance
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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National Bank to just have a budget to support the patients and the whole nation. So,
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this meaning
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meaning
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means
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 many
country
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countries
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 has a
dept
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debt
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 to the bank that
need
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needs
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 to pay and with the help of workers and consumers
tax
 and no time it will be paid.
Secondly
, the educational
sectors
 will be damaged as well, if the
people
decided
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 to not contribute a
little
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small
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 portion of earned
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money
monney
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money
 to the state because learning is vital to one's life, it will give a lot of opportunities and it will
also
 boost the
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economic
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economy
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economic
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 growth of the
country
.
For example
, if all the
citizen
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citizens
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 of the
country
 are professionals and educated, the investors will be attracted to invest. So, education is one of the
reason
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reasons
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 why
country
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a country
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 is
successfull
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successful
successfully
. In conclusion, some
people
 will believe that
tax
 is
burden
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 to them, but
this
 is the only way to sustain and support the economy,
health
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and health
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 care. and
education
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the education
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 system of the state.
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task achievement
Consider providing more diverse and specific examples to support your points. For instance, referencing specific health or education programs funded by taxes could strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Try to address potential counterarguments in your essay. Acknowledging and refuting opposing views can make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to enhance the readability of your essay. This will help convey your ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains only one main idea. This will improve the logical flow and make your essay easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure in your essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps in delivering your message effectively.
task achievement
Your essay presents clear and comprehensive ideas, with a focus on how taxes impact health and education sectors.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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