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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email •recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •explain how your friend could learn this sport •suggest that you both learn this sport together. Write at leasr 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear ...............,

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Dear Jack, I hope you're doing well! I was thinking about your question about learning a new sport and I'm going to share some thoughts I have. First of all, I can say that
football
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 is the most popular sport in our town, so it's clear that we have a lot of
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 schools here,
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 to the uncountable number of the smaller
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 fields, where you can play with your friends for free. Because of that, If you ask me, I would say that
football
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 is the best choice. As I mentioned, there are a lot of
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 academies. The most known and popular are Arsenal and Dynamo,
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, others aren't
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. I'm saying that, because I don't know the way to learn
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 better
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 than being enrolled in one of them. They provide a polished training process and experienced coaches will take care of your progress, not without some pressure by the way. And you know what? I'm going to team with you if you decide to go to the academy. I like
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 and often play
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 my friends, so it should be fun. For sure, you can join us in our friendly matches too, I will let you know when we will set up the next event. See you on the pitch! Vlad

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coherence cohesion
Continue to structure your emails with clear paragraphs, each addressing a distinct point. This makes your writing easy to follow and reader-friendly.
task achievement
To achieve an even higher score, consider varying your sentence structure a bit more to demonstrate a wide range of grammar skills.
task achievement
Each paragraph clearly addresses one part of the task: recommending a sport, explaining how to learn it, and suggesting learning together.
coherence cohesion
The email is well-organized with a clear greeting and closing, giving it a conversational and friendly tone suitable for the context.
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