The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The table chart below illustrates information about citizens of Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey and on which activities they prefer to spend their time in 2002.
Overall
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, we can see that residents of Ireland chose to spend their time and money on
food
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.
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Italy is the most stylish country. Approximately one-third of citizens of Ireland prefer to spend their money on
food
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, drinks and tobacco.
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only around 2% of all did with their hobby and education. One-sixth of people in Italy ate and spent their time on
food
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such
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as drinks and tobacco. And slightly under 10% of people went to shopping.
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only 3,20% of
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country is interested in studying. Spain had 18,80% and 6,51% in
food
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and clothing respectively. And Spanish had the lowest percentage in study education and the same trend had residents of Sweden in
food
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items.
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, Turkish people had more proportion to eat tobacco and drink and learn and do their hobbies.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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