The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the process of producing
sugar
from sugar
cane.
Overall
, it is a seven-phase Man-made, linear process. It begins with the growing of sugar
cane and ends with the drying and cooling of sugar
this
process will be completed without any adding for raw materials.
To begin
, sugar
cane is needed for 12-18 months for growing, after it is grown the farmer starts harvesting all of the canes by hand or by truck to collect the canes. Then
, crushed this
harvested sugar
manually to produce a juice
. Next,
use of limestone filter to filter purified juice
.
In the subsequent stage, the evaporator will begin by pouring the juice
into the oven and letting it for a high degree of hotness until this
juice
becomes syrup. Following
this
, sugar
crystals were separated from syrup in order to centrifuge. Finally
, dried and cooled collected sugar
was before being transported to the stores.Submitted by rraghad.b on
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