The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Overall
, it is a seven-phase Man-made, linear process. It begins with the growing of Linking Words
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cane is needed for 12-18 months for growing, after it is grown the farmer starts harvesting all of the canes by hand or by truck to collect the canes. Use synonyms
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In the subsequent stage, the evaporator will begin by pouring the Use synonyms
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crystals were separated from syrup in order to centrifuge. Use synonyms
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