The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the process of producing
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane.
Overall
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, it is a seven-phase Man-made, linear process. It begins with the growing of
sugar
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cane and ends with the drying and cooling of
sugar
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this
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process will be completed without any adding for raw materials.
To begin
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,
sugar
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cane is needed for 12-18 months for growing, after it is grown the farmer starts harvesting all of the canes by hand or by truck to collect the canes.
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, crushed
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harvested
sugar
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manually to produce a
juice
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.
Next,
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use of limestone filter to filter purified
juice
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. In the subsequent stage, the evaporator will begin by pouring the
juice
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into the oven and letting it for a high degree of hotness until
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juice
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becomes syrup.
Following
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this
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,
sugar
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crystals were separated from syrup in order to centrifuge.
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, dried and cooled collected
sugar
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was before being transported to the stores.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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