Your best friend just had her first baby. You are currently overseas but will be returning to your hometown in a week. Write to your friend. In your letter, Congratulate your friend. Tell her when you will be returning home. Ask when you could drop in to meet her and the baby.

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Dear Johana, I am thrilled to hear the news of you becoming a mother after almost six years of married life. I can't imagine how joyful you must be right now with your sweet little baby sleeping beside you.

Therefore

, I convey my warm regards to you and your husband on

this

special occasion. I wish I could see you and your baby soon,

however

, I just arrived in Singapore a day back on a business trip to sign off a contract with an innovator in Singapore by today evening at 4pm.

For

this

reason, I won't be able to come to see you right now,

nevertheless

, I will return back to home within a week after finishing my work here.

Moreover

, you will be in the hospital in the meantime and do let me know when you return back home. I will drop by to meet you and your family next week whenever you are free.

In addition

to that, please do let me know if you want me to purchase anything special from Singapore. Have a great day ! Hope to catch up with you soon ! Lots of love, Paul Surendar.

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coherence cohesion

Consider simplifying some sentences to improve overall readability.

coherence cohesion

Avoid abrupt transitions; aim for smoother flow between ideas or sentences.

task achievement

The letter covers all the tasks comprehensively: congratulating the friend, informing about the return date, and inquiring about a suitable time to visit.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is warm, friendly, and appropriate for the context, perfectly matching the intended purpose.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are well executed, contributing to the overall friendly and personal tone.

coherence cohesion

The letter effectively uses paragraphs to separate different ideas, making it easy to follow.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

194 words

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