Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
The increasing
number
of multinational Use synonyms
companies
in developing countries brings benefits Use synonyms
as well as
drawbacks. There are some benefits of Linking Words
this
trend Linking Words
such
as the increase of foreign domestic Linking Words
investments
and job availability in the country. Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
this
trend could Linking Words
also
result in the lack of development of small and medium local enterprises and a decrease in the sales of local products.
On the one hand, the main advantage of the increase in international Linking Words
companies
is the addition of new Use synonyms
investments
. Use synonyms
As a result
, developing countries can use their Linking Words
investments
to fund essential services, Use synonyms
such
as health and education. Linking Words
Moreover
, international Linking Words
companies
will open many high-quality job opportunities to the population. Use synonyms
This
will decrease the unemployment rate and push more economic growth. Linking Words
For example
, Vietnam's economy has started to grow and its unemployment rate is declining after Linking Words
opened
itself to more foreign Wrong verb form
opening
companies
, especially the manufacturing industry.
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On the other hand
, the growing Linking Words
number
of overseas Use synonyms
companies
could hinder emerging local enterprises. Use synonyms
This
is Linking Words
due to
the fact that many small and medium local Linking Words
companies
have small Use synonyms
investments
and are not able to compete with bigger foreign Use synonyms
companies
. Use synonyms
That is
to say, the foreign Linking Words
companies
will take their market and make them more difficult to compete. Use synonyms
In addition
, because the market is filled by foreign Linking Words
companies
with high-quality goods, it is Use synonyms
also
possible to see a decrease in local product purchases. Linking Words
This
is because many people believe it is better to buy foreign products than local goods. Linking Words
For example
, nowadays many textile businesses in Indonesia are closed Linking Words
due to
their inability to compete with clothes from China and Vietnam that are more preferred by Indonesians.
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To conclude
, the growing Linking Words
number
of multinational Use synonyms
companies
in developing countries brings advantages and disadvantages. The advantages include a higher Use synonyms
number
of foreign Use synonyms
investments
and an increase in job availability Use synonyms
while
the disadvantages include the unequal competition for small and medium local businesses and a decline in local products' sales.Linking Words
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