Some people argued that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. However, some people believe that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivations for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishments. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

The judging of a criminal has always been a highly
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and long-lasting process. The verdict for the committed
crime
varies a lot, depending on the accused person, their motivation and the circumstances. Some believe that the punishment should not be influenced by these and be the same regardless of the type of
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crime
. The fixed punishment has many
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advantages
when it comes to the judging system. It makes the job of the jury easier and faster, which leads to
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increase
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the number of
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cases solved in time.
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involved in it.
On the other hand
, each criminal and their story
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different. It seems unethical to treat every person the same, even if their reasons, age, social status etc. are various.
Furthermore
, the
crime
itself can have a wide spectrum.
For instance
,
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can be defined as a
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manslaughter
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or a martyr. The wrongdoing is
also
dependent on the motivation that sometimes is judged by society as accurate or even necessary. It shows how
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is each case and that it is hard to judge everyone the same way. In conclusion, I believe that the verdict should be influenced by many issues and the accused should not be treated the same way just because the type of
crime
they have done is similar. Not only is it unfair, but
also
the judging system can be seen as not
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believable
or not worth trusting by the people.
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