The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years.
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how many mobile phones were sold in millions from 2006 to 2012 by Nokia, Ericsson,
Samsung
, Motorola, and
Apple
.
Overall
, whilst the biggest
grow
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of
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cell
phones
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phone
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sales is led by
Apple
,
Samsung
reached the top
in
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the list. Ericsson, Motorola, and Nokia had to face a noticeable decline. The biggest increase in
the
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sales
are
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led by
Apple
and
Samsung
.
Apple
has shown the biggest growth starting from 2.3
million
in 2007 to 135.8 in 2012.
Similarly
,
Samsung
has experienced
a
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growth almost three times from 117 in 2006 to 396.5 in 2012 respectively, climbing to the top
in
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the list.
Therefore
, Nokia was increasing stable from 345
million
in 2006 to 475 in 2008, they started to decline progressively to 335
million
in 2012.
Also
, Motorola experienced a marginal slump from 210
million
in 2006 to 28
million
in 2012.
Furthermore
,
while
Ericsson
has
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reached its top in 2007 with 102
million
, starting with 74 in 2006, the numbers decreased considerably to 28 in 2012.
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