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You want to sell your television. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Why you are selling the television Describe the television Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it

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Hello, Henry. I hope I am writing to you at the correct time. I have an offer for you. I decided to sell my television, which I bought
last
 year. My parents gave me a gift for Christmas, a brand new model. Even though it isn’t fresh it works perfectly. So, I’m thinking you might be interested in
this
.
This
 is a great TV, it has five sockets with different types of wires. You can connect to PlayStation and enjoy wonderful image quality. In fact,
this
 TV can connect with Bluetooth columns.
Moreover
, it is fifty inches diagonal, so it’s perfect for watching movies. The set includes a remote control.
However
, if you are interested in buying it, we can meet
this
 week. I would prefer to see each other near my home, if you want to do a TV check you can do it. The next weekend I will help you transport it if you buy it. Looking forward to hearing from you, Olga
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task achievement
Consider including some specific details about the features and performance of the television to make your description more vivid. For example, mention the brand or the specific model of the TV.
coherence cohesion
Ensure some sentences have a smoother transition between ideas. For instance, add connecting phrases like 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', or 'In addition' to improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a clear and logical structure, with an introduction, body, and conclusion arranged cohesively.
task achievement
The purpose of writing is clearly stated, and the main points are well-covered, demonstrating a comprehensive response to the task.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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