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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The bar chart delineates
ratio
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the ratio
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 of homeowners who own vehicles in a specific region in Europe, within the three decades from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
, an integral note that has emerged is the average
homes
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home
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do
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does
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 not have
their
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its
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 own transportation service, followed by having only one car
,
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 and
subsequently
 owning two cars per household. Right off the bat, it can be witnessed that residents with zero
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in their
possesion
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possession
 declined from the year 1971 to 2001, which is from approximately half of the fraction (49%) in 2017 to a ratio of 42% in 1981.
Moreover
, it continuously decreased to a value of 30%, which is one-third of the tabulated data for residents with no vehicular
ownerships
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ownership
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 in 1991. To
commense
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commence
, the fraction of zero car
possesion
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possession
 stabilised at 30% in the following year as well. Other than that, in 1971, citizens of the country recorded
a
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apply
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35% of the population owning a single car,
then
follwed
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followed
 by a negligible decrease
by
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of
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 3% to an amount of 32% in 1981.
Additionally
, a gradual decrease throughout the decade caused 1991 to observe only 18% of its fraction of mono-car ownership.
Finally
, a sharp spike of more than double the ratio of owners
occured
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occurred
, reaching a peak of 42% in 2001. Concurrently, the ownership of two cars per household fluctuated over the period of 4 decades; whereby the analysis recorded
a
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17%, 28%, 22%, and 31% of bi-car owners in the
year
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years
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 1971, 1981, 1991, and 2001 respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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