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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter •give details about the concert •describe how you won the tickets •explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you.

#two #tickets #concert #friend #•give #•describe #•explain #you’ve
Dear John, I hope
this
 letter finds you well and happy. It has been a
while
 since we
last
 caught up, and I thought it was about time we connected again. I have just won two tickets to a concert and it will be a pleasure to go with you. The concert is in Stanley Park near the river. The event will be starting
this
 Friday around 6 PM. I am very apologizing for
giving
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letting
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 you know now, but I have just got information about lottery results. By the way, the lottery is a very funny story.
Last
 month I saw an email in my box, I filled in information about my hobby, interest
additionally
create
Wrong verb form
created
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 a story
how
Change preposition
about how
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 I spend my free time, and boom I had won two tickets. I am very happy about it. It is very important for me to go with you, we are both very busy nowadays, so we do not have many opportunities to meet and talk. I hope you think the same that's why I want to go with you and I am sure we will have a great time together. Look forward to hearing from you. Best Wishes, George
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct and free of minor errors. For instance, 'I am very apologizing for giving you know now' should be 'I apologize for letting you know on short notice.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs have a clear single idea. For example, the third paragraph could have a more explicit topic sentence stating that it addresses how you won the tickets.
task achievement
Double-check the use of articles and prepositions. In some places, they are either missing or wrongly used, such as 'it will be a pleasure to go with you' could be better phrased 'it would be a pleasure to have you join me.'
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a warm and friendly tone suitable for writing to a friend.
logical structure
The letter is structured well with clear paragraphs focusing on different aspects of the news.
complete response
All points of the prompt have been covered adequately: details about the concert, how you won the tickets, and why you chose your friend.
greeting and closing
The greetings and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enthusiasm
  • eager
  • anticipation
  • once-in-a-lifetime
  • music genre
  • unforgettable experience
  • headlining
  • spectacular
  • venue
  • line-up
  • e-tickets
  • VIP access
  • social media giveaway
  • radio contest
  • camaraderie
  • bond over
  • tribute
  • nostalgia
  • cherish
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