The table illustrates the expense of the consumer on various items in five countries (Ireland, Turkey, Italy, Spain and Sweden) in the year of 2002.

The table illustrates the expense of the consumer on various items in five countries (Ireland, Turkey, Italy, Spain and Sweden) in the year of 2002.
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The table compares data about the expenditure of the national consumer on various items in five
countries
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in the year 2002 .
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, it is evident that spending on food, drinks and tobacco dominated in all
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the expense consumed on leisure and education was the lowest in the same year . To start with , Turkey recorded a percentage of 32.14% which is the highest in Food and drinks,
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to tobacco , followed by Ireland which had a percentage of 28.91% .
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, Spain's spending was relatively low in comparison to the previously mentioned
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, and the national consumption was 18.80% .
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, Italy and Spain had the
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lowest percentages with 16.63 and 15.77% respectively . Spending on Clothing and footwear in all five
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was almost equal except for Italy with 9.00% of its consumer expenses.
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, Italy and Sweden consumers spent roughly 3.00% on leisure and education .
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, Spain and Ireland spent less by around 0.5 % on these items . Yet , Turkey consumers paid out 4.35% on these items .
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