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The table below shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the number of
research
students
 and the pie chart illustrates the
proportion
 of them. Both charts compare data between 2001 and 2010 in Australian
university
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universities
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
research
students
 increased over time and local
students
 dominated in both years. In 2001, there
was
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 33,657 local
research
 scholars which gradually grew to 39,488
students
 by 2010. It showed majority
students
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of students
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 come from
indigeneous
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indigenous
area
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areas
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, amounting to 87% of total
students
 in the first period.
Additionally
, the
proportion
 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 was similar,
accounted
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 for 44% and 43%, respectively.
However
, the total percentage decreased to 73% by 2010, with
similar
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proportion
 between boys and girls, 35% and 38%, respectively.
In contrast
, in 2001, the number of international
research
students
 was only 5,192,
however
, it sharply climbed to 14,593 scholars by 2010. In the meantime, the total of international
students
 was only 13%, with the
proportion
 of 9% girls and 4% boys and
tt
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it
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 firmly climbed to double (27%) by the end of
period
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the period
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, with
the
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a
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proportion
 of 12% women and 15% men.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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