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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) ion five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarising brief summary. At least 150 words.

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) ion five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarising brief summary. At least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the detailed
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 of
tax
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 compared to the GDP of each country during the 30 ye ars from 1975 to 2005. Overview.
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 graph illustrates the rise and fall compared to the
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 of
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 in five countries starting with the USA, Korea, Japan, Turkey and ending with Sweden. The graph mostly rose
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 there were some exceptions
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 In Turkey which was in 1985. In 1975 in Sweden the
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 was 46% and after a decade it grew and
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 47% and in 1995 the indicator of the
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 showed 51%
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 in 2005 the
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 of
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 consisted of 70.1%. In the USA
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 was 25.1% in 1975 after ten years it had increased
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25.4% in 1975 its growth to the
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 of 27.1%
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 2005 it was 27.4%. In Korea
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 was 1975 15.1%
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 in 1985 it grew intensively and had become 27% in spite of that in 1995 the
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 decreased to the
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 of 26% in 2005 the
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 of
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 had become 27.3%. Japan started in 1975 the
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 with 15% and
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 slightly growth in 1985 to the
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 of 16% in 1985 the
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 increased incredibly to the
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 of 23% and by the end of 2005 it had reached 32.1% In Turkey
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 was 16.4% in 1975, and during the next ten years in 1985 it decreased to the
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 of 15% despite that in 1995 the
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 grew to the
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 of 24%
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end
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 in 2005 it ended at 27.4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, tax, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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