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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
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The given table shows the situation in five countries that apply collecting tax for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
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, Sweden has the hugest increase compared to others,
while
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 the USA had only a few
changes
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 in percentage. Sweden had 46% in 1975
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 and had a slight increase in the next
decade
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, and a few percentages more in the following
decade
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, but in 2005 had a significant growth until 70.1%. The USA did not have
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 interesting
changes
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. Starting with 25.1% in 1975, almost no
changes
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 in 1985, a few per
cent
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 rise in 1995 and minimal
changes
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 in the
last
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decade
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.
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 other countries started with 25 and 46 per
cent
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, Korea had only 15.1% of taxes,
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,
this
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 country had a sharp jump in the first
decade
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 to 12%, apply 1995 Korea had decreased to 1 per
cent
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, but
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 per
cent
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 returned back in the next 10 years Japan and Turkey were similar to each other, in 1975 started with 15-16 per
cent
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, in 1985 had a 1 per
cent
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 increase-decrease, and in 1995 soared to 23-24 responsively. In the
last
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 year Japan had 32%, and 27% for Turkey.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, decade, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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