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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.
#two #maps #show #site #college
The given maps illustrate the changes which took place in Lynwich
College
 in 2006 and in the current day.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,today's many significant challenges related to facilities
which
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were added compared to the past map of the
college
. In the year 2006,
area
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the area
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 was
fulfild
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fulfilled
by
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 trees.Today's library was constructed in spite of cutting down
treese
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trees
 which were in the southwest part of the
college
 and
college
 building 2 which was above is stayed unchanged.
Moreover
,the Sports field which is situated in the southeast of
college
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the college
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 was expanded.
By contrast
,
car
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the car
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 park of the
noutherneast
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southernmost
 was
shrinked
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shrunk
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 and
the
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bike storage was established nearby it.
However
,below
these
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these,
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 the library was replaced into
sports
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a sports
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center
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centre
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.The most noticeable is that
new
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a new
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 cafeteria was built
in stead
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instead
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 of the path which has
the
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access to all 6
facities
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facilities
.
In addition
,the bus station was established below the
northest
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northern
 road.
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