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Band 3.5

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day.

The map illustration changes that happened in Lynwid
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college
Fix capitalization
College
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 in 2006 and now .
Overall
Linking Words
 ,
college
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 transformed from
ordinary
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an ordinary
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college
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 to
modern
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a modern
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college
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, new
bulding
Correct your spelling
buildings
 were added . As
Correct article usage
the maps
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maps
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map
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 shows, in
2006
Punctuation problem
2006,
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at
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in
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right
Correct article usage
the right
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corner
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corner,
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 there was
car
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a car
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 park
but
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, but
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 now Bike
Storege
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Storage
 was added near
to
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apply
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it.In
2006
Punctuation problem
2006,
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 there was
library
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a library
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 behind
car
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the car
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 park , now it
is
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has been
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 changed to
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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.In 2006 Sports field was bigger
but
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, but
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 it
now
Verb problem
has now
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it
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apply
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became
Wrong verb form
become
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smaller after changes.
College
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 building 2at
left
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the left
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 corner stayed
at
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in
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 the same place and did not change.
Besides
Linking Words
 to
College
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 building one there was
green
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a green
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 zone
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Punctuation problem
; however
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however
Punctuation problem
however,
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 it has
changet
Correct your spelling
changed
 to
library
Correct article usage
a library
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.In
2006
Punctuation problem
2006,
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 at the
center
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centre
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 of
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Correct article usage
the college
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college
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college,
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 there was
path
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a path
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Linking Words
Punctuation problem
; however
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however
Punctuation problem
however,
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 now it is widened
and
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, and
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cafeteria
Correct article usage
a cafeteria
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 was added to the
centere
Correct your spelling
centre
.In
2006
Punctuation problem
2006,
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 near to
road
Punctuation problem
road,
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 there was
green
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a green
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 zone
Linking Words
Punctuation problem
; however
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however
Punctuation problem
however,
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 now
bus
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a bus
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stope
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stop
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was
Wrong verb form
has been
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 added .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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