In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?
In today's society, college
students
prefer to stay with their families, Use synonyms
while
other Linking Words
students
choose to go to the other Use synonyms
city
for education. Use synonyms
However
living with the family during education can guarantee that we have supporters on our side, and Linking Words
students
become more responsible Use synonyms
while
living alone in the other Linking Words
city
to pursue their dreams. I believe, the advantages of living far away from families, outweigh the disadvantages.
On one hand, the primary benefit of living away from home is the significant opportunity to develop our personal abilities. When new Use synonyms
students
move to the new Use synonyms
city
, they encounter a challenge about how to adapt and survive by themselves. Use synonyms
Students
have to learn basic life skills Use synonyms
such
as cooking, cleaning the room, and groceries. Other than that, Linking Words
students
have to understand budgeting, and really crucial to control their living expenses. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
students
record all their expenses every month, so they can evaluate their cash flow every month and Use synonyms
as a result
, they can have their money management and maybe they Linking Words
also
have savings.
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On the other hand
, letting Linking Words
students
stay alone in the new cities, brings potential disadvantages because feeling isolation and loneliness. Use synonyms
Students
have to pretend to be as strong as they can with themself. Moving to new cities often brings unexpected hardship, which leads to emotional uncontrol. In their hometown, Use synonyms
students
usually have their parents and siblings as a place to share their thoughts and problems, Use synonyms
while
in a new Linking Words
city
, they need to put a boundary with their friends at the beginning of moving. Use synonyms
For example
, A new student with high aspirations may feel overwhelmed by loneliness in a strange Linking Words
city
, leading to decreased motivation.
In conclusion, living away from home during university offers opportunities for self-improvement, Use synonyms
such
as gaining independence and life skills. Linking Words
However
, it can Linking Words
also
lead to feelings of isolation and loneliness. Balancing these aspects is essential for academics as they navigate Linking Words
this
important period in their lives.Linking Words
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph maintains a clear focus and logically connects to the next. Try to make transitions smoother.
task achievement
Although the essay clearly addresses both sides of the argument, further elaboration on the disadvantages could provide more balance.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Main points are well-supported with examples, which helps in illustrating the arguments clearly.
task achievement
The task is fully addressed, with a clear stance on the advantages and disadvantages.
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