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The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.

The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. write at least 150 words.
#information #amount #beer #fruit #juice #person #year #countries
The
table
 shows information about how many numbers of
beer
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beers
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 and fruit
juice
uses
Wrong verb form
are used
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many
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by many
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 people during
whole
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the whole
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 year who
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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lives
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live
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 in many countries.
Overall
, the
table
 illustrates two tables every one
have
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has
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 ten countries
moreover
 each country how many
consuming
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apply
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quantities of
beer
 and
juice
 . First of all , the number of
beer
 was the highest amount
by
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in
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 Ireland
that was
Verb problem
which
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uses
Wrong verb form
used
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 155
litres
in contrast
 the lowest point
of
Change preposition
for
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 fruit
juice
 was in New Zealand it was 24.8
litres
however
 in the
beer
 as
it is clear
that
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apply
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from the
table
 the tree top they consumed more than 100
litres
likewise
 Belgium
in addition
 Denmark they have the same quantity it was 98
litres
then
 United Kingdom was under 98
LItres
 in the different side the bottom
table
 of
beer
 they uses just under 90
litres
 .
On the other hand
, the higher amount of fruit
juice
 was above half
Correct article usage
a litres
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litres
Fix the agreement mistake
litre
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while
 Germany , Australia, Sweden and Austria
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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have similar quantities it was under 40
litres
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, beer, juice, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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