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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied map indicates the design of a
museum
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 and a lot of developments which were provided over a ten-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the whole
museum
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 witnessed
new
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various construction and urbanization over the period. In 1998, there
did not
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use to be
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a
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restaurant in the
museum
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.
However
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, a new restaurant was erected in the
museum
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 in the northwest of it. Another striking development is the construction of a temporary exhibition room in the west of the
museum
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 from 1998 to 2008.
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, there used to be a huge cafe in the north of the
museum
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 in 1998, which was shrunk in the same location in 2008.
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, a new WC was built in the north of the area in 2008. It is interesting to note that the permanent exhibition rooms remained unchanged in the east of the
museum
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 between 1998 to 2008. Another notable change is the conversion of a temporary exhibition room to bags and coats at
shop
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the shop
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.
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, the position of
tickets
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 entrance-exit
maintained
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 the same in the south of the
museum
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 from 1998 to 2008.
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, there used to be a large garden in the middle of the region in 1998. Whilst, the government introduced some new facilities,
such
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 as cafe sitting
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 and fountains in the garden in 2008.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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