The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the percentage of citizen's consumption of
coffee
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and tea during the
last
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4 weeks, in 5 different Australian metropolis.
Firstly
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, going to a café was almost unanimously the most popular in all the cities. Despite the gap being very small, only Adelaide was the second choice after buying instant
coffee
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.
On the other hand
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, in cities like Sydney or Melbourne, frequenting cafés was by far the most popular choice of more than
three-fifth
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of the population!
Secondly
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, instant
coffee
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was the second most chosen among the interviewees. In fact, in Sydney, Melbourne and Adelaide was between 45 and 50 points percentages,
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in Brisbane was chosen by more than half of the population. In the end, in Hobart almost reached the 60%!
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, acquiring fresh
coffee
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was the least preferred in all of the towns.
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Brisbane
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Adelaide didn't even reach 35%,
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, in Hobart roughly 40%. In conclusion, in Melbourne between 40% and 45% chose it, but the city which preferred it was Sydney, where the people who chose it was almost 45%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • buying and drinking habits
  • percentage
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
  • consumption trends
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • notable
  • speculate
  • features
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