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The graph below shows the number of car manufactured from 2020 to 2035.

The graph below shows the number of car manufactured from 2020 to 2035.
The line graph below compares the amount of
car
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cars
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 produced in countries -
China
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Japan and
USA
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the USA
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- between 2020 and 2035.
Overall
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, it can be seen clearly that the data
of
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on
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cars
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 manufactured in
China
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increasing
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increased
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 gradually over the whole period,
while
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 the reverse was true for other countries, they will have experienced a downward trend over 15 years. It is
also
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 worth
to note
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 that
China
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 will become the dominating one by the end of the span. In 2020, Japan and USA were leading in producing
cars
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 at around 400 and 300
thosands
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thousand
thousands
 respectively,
whereas
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 the figures
of
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for
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UK
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the UK
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 and
China
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 started from 200 and 100
thousands
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thousand
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 respectively. By 2025, car production
of
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in
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 the USA will have declined to approximately 200
thousands
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thousand
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,
however
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, others had minor changes.
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, in 2030,
China
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 will overtake the USA and UK at over 100 thousand
cars
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.
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, by 2035, Japan will have
rapid
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a rapid
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 decrease from 300 to 100 thousand
cars
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 will be manufactured and
China
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 will reach the peak of 200
thousands
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thousand
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cars
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 that will be produced.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, china with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing output
  • Production trend
  • Significant peak
  • Notable decline
  • Fluctuation
  • Technological advancements
  • Economic challenges
  • Consumer demand
  • Sustainability
  • Government regulation
  • Predictive analysis
  • Market dynamics
  • Environmental impact
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