The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates how many people have visited an
island
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on
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in
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the Caribbean
ocean
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since 2010.
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, a group stayed on cruise ships and others remained on
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island
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the island
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both
demonstarted
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demonstrated
a growth in numbers over the period with some fluctuations. In 2010, the highest
number
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were
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in
the
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apply
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favour
for
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of
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those who stayed on the
island
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, with 0.75
million
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visitor
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visitors
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.
This
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number
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incresed
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increased
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to 1.5
million
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in 2013 before reaching a plateau until 2015. The plateau displayed a small decrease of 1.25
million
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in 2016
then
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it backed to its original figure of 2015. On the
contraty
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contrary
, those who stayed on cruise ships were
lesat
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late
at the beginning of the period
demonstrated
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and demonstrated
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a strong upward growth in their numbers. Their figure
of
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2010 of 0.25
million
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soared to 2
million
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in 2017.
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, the total
number
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of travellers to
this
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particular Caribbean
island
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experienced a
dramatical
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growth. Their
number
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doubled to 2
million
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by 2013 and continued to increase to reach 3.5
million
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in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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