The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The line graph illustrates how many people have visited an
island
on
the Caribbean Change preposition
in
ocean
since 2010. Capitalize word
Ocean
Overall
, a group stayed on cruise ships and others remained on island
both Add an article
the island
demonstarted
a growth in numbers over the period with some fluctuations.
In 2010, the highest Correct your spelling
demonstrated
number
were
in Change the verb form
was
the
favour Correct article usage
apply
for
those who stayed on the Change preposition
of
island
, with 0.75 million
visitor
. Change to a plural noun
visitors
This
number
incresed
to 1.5 Correct your spelling
increased
increases
million
in 2013 before reaching a plateau until 2015. The plateau displayed a small decrease of 1.25 million
in 2016 then
it backed to its original figure of 2015.
On the contraty
, those who stayed on cruise ships were Correct your spelling
contrary
lesat
at the beginning of the period Correct your spelling
late
demonstrated
a strong upward growth in their numbers. Their figure Correct word choice
and demonstrated
of
2010 of 0.25 Change preposition
in
million
soared to 2 million
in 2017.
To sum up
, the total number
of travellers to this
particular Caribbean island
experienced a dramatical
growth. Their Replace the word
dramatic
number
doubled to 2 million
by 2013 and continued to increase to reach 3.5 million
in 2017.Submitted by mark99fa on
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